IELTS Band 9 report, topic: Two bar charts showing the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls

This is a model response to a Writing Task 1 topic from the High Scorer's Choice IELTS Practice Tests book series (reprinted with permission). Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged 12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Sample Band 9 Report This report refers to two bar charts. The first gives data on obesity in boys by ethnicity between the ages of twelve and nineteen in the United States for 2004 and 2014, and the second gives the same data for girls. Overall, it is clear that in both demographics the percentage of obese teenagers increased by 2014, with Hispanic boys and Non-Hispanic Black girls being the most at risk. In boys, the obesity figures for 2004 were similar for all three ethnicities given, at 12, 11 and 13 per cent for Non-Hispanic White, Non-Hispanic Black and Hispanic respectively. In 2014, these figures rose to 17, 20 and 27 per cent for the same ethnicities. All the figures for 2014 are significantly higher compared to 2004, especially the last, with over a quarter of this ethnic group being classed as obese. In girls, the obesity figures for 2004 were similar to boys for Non-Hispanic White and Hispanic, at 9 and 12 per cent respectively. The figure for Non-Hispanic Black was significantly higher for girls at 16 per cent. In 2014, Non-Hispanic White and Hispanic both rose 5 per cent and remained less than their male counterparts. Non-Hispanic Black girls, however, rose to 29 per cent, which is the highest figure in both charts. ⇒ Get your own writing checked here ⇐ Recommended Resources Academic IELTS Book "Personally, I can say that your book was so fundamental to my preparation that without it I think I would barely receive a 6.5." - Leonardo from Brazil Learn more BUY NOW General Training IELTS Book "This book provides concise and useful tips to complete all test tasks well and on-time. Thanks again for recommending this great book to me." - Michelle P. from Malaysia Learn more BUY NOW Practice Tests for IELTS "As it turned out, the test was in exactly the same format as your examples. I would not have been able to achieve my 8 overall score on my own" - Martin from Germany Learn more BUY NOW Online IELTS Preparation Course "My overall band is 8 - thanks again for your invaluable help... the feedback from you is much more helpful than any other courses." - Anne F. Learn more BUY NOW Useful Links Popular Topics Connect New! Free App for Practice Free Online Course Study Books Essay Samples Subscribe to daily tips Recent IELTS exams IELTS Speaking IELTS results competition Instagram YouTube Facebook Twitter RSS feed Web

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